I just rewatched your post. Disregard my first comment about the key. I think I must have been on drugs, ... too much coffee maybe.Hey Shel. As you know very well, I really value your opinion and considered intently what you wrote. I don't feel I should take this to a lower key, I felt comfortable with it, I really feel it is well in my (admittedly limited) range. It is a real rock tune, a bit of a screamer.
Your point on changing up the strumming however I take aboard absolutely. The way to make the tune much more interesting is a couple of really nice solos that I am not capable of right now unfortunately. Here is the tune by the man himself, with a great vocalist accompanying him. A few things here, he plays some great solos, he makes the Maton sound devine, and the whole vibe is really cool. Take a look:
Your version sounds great.
I do love your voice in it's lower range, but this version is very expressive.
I know you like to get feedback that includes suggestions rather than just 'Good job' all the time. SO perhaps I was trying too hard too. Drugs, trying too hard... not a good combo...not pretty.
Shel