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This is the first song I ever wrote....written in 2012 and finally produced in 2014 for our local community band in Hobart, Australia. I sing lead vocals, play my 6 string Cole Clark acoustic guitar, play harmonica, did the lead guitar solo and contributed high harmonies backing vocals. I am the bass player in the band but I have been learning acoustic guitar since 2012 and for the purposes of this song I play acoustic guitar because I cannot sing and play bass at the same time. The song is based on my personal experience and a true story about a girl who looks like Natalie Portman. The lyrics are exaggerated in true Hollywood style for dramatic effect. lol Any comments, feedback, opinions, critique etc are welcome:

Congratulations Sabathiel! That was way cool! I like the slightly punk attitude. Its very easy to listen to. Could you post the lyrics please. You're not the only TGer from Oz with that hat, must be something in the water. I can imagine, it must be really hard to play bass and sing!

Tazmania is a place I'd love to see one day.....

Chris in Swiss

Sure, here are the lyrics:

Intro riff
Instrumental: G5 – D – C - C
Am – D – G5 - G5

Verse 1
G5 D C C
T’was a warm and sunny bright December day
G5 D C C
I walked into a big City department store
G5 D C C
The music playing on the speakers was reggae
Am D G5 G5
A typical crowded shopping Saturday

Verse 2
G5 D C C
I looked around for nothing in particular
G5 D C C
I gazed across the counter of one checkpoint sale
G5 D C C
I saw her unaware that I was blown away
Am D G5 G5
The moment was just like a fairy tale
Am C G5 G5
Flattery’s OK just don’t inhale


Chorus:
Em D C (C)) (D)
She constantly occupies my mind (she’s on his mind)
Em D C (C) (D)
A face without a name just makes me blind (makes him blind)
Em D C C
I call her Natalie she looks like one (she looks like one)
Am D G5 G5
Oscar winning actress in Black Swan
Am D G5 G5
I only wish I’d break the ties that bind



(Instrumental solo lead verse 1 chord progression)
G5 - D - C - (C) (D) (2X)
G5 - D - C - C
Am - D - G5 - G5

Chorus:
Em D C (C)) (D)
She constantly occupies my mind (she’s on his mind)
Em D C (C) (D)
A face without a name just makes me blind (makes him blind)
Em D C C
I call her Natalie she looks like one (she looks like one)
Am D G5 G5
Oscar winning actress in Black Swan
Am D G5 G5
I only wish I’d break the ties that bind

Verse 3:
G5 D C (C)(D)
Since then I regularly pass her by
G5 D C (C)(D)
More than just her looks it was her vibe
G5 D C C
Wondrous enigmatic youthful charming smile
Am D G5 G5
Grace personifies a classic style
Am C G5 G5
If only I just took that extra mile

Verse 4
G5 D C (C)(D)
But now she does not work there anymore
G5 D C (C)(D)
I’ve lost the girl I should have known
G5 D C C
A memory and this love song still remain
Am D G5 G5
Will I ever see her again (2X)
Am C G5 G5 end on G sus (on beat one of a new bar)
Will I ever see you again

Interesting! I enjoyed that. I think I'll give it another listen.

That's quite a production. Well done.

Watched this a few days ago and forgot to comment.

Nicely done!

Hey Sabathiel,

I’m glad Acoustic Al brought this back to the top. I saw it when you first posted it but was too busy to reply. As I was listening to it, I thought that a dead stop between the verse and chorus might add some dynamic. Here is an example in the John Mellencamp version of Wild Night:



Also notice how the instruments tend to be scaled back during the verses and the intensity is increased during the choruses. That might work in your song, too.

Just a thought,

Hydroman52