Bit by the songwriting bug again...

[haoli25]

Please do an update on this one, Cori. I really like it so far. Thanks for posting the video.



Bill

[cosmicmechanic]

This song succeeds in creating interest in the story and a mood so it should last longer, at least another verse (or two?). Very pleasant, Cori and wife.

Pierre

[wammer]

Cori

So impressed that you can write your own tune and lyrics...........Thats a talent


No advise but to just keep doin what you do.

Tammy

[lueders]

Billiam- glad you like it so far & thank ya, Sir. We'll have to do a follow up.

Pierre- Thank you very much! I did add a verse and I think it was definitely needed. I'm glad
you thought it was successful.

Tammy- I dunno how much talent, but thanks.
So, does that mean you'll sing with Krista? (Think it over will ya? Your
authentic sounding voice would be killer on this. Totally!)

[wammer]

hhhhmmmmmmmmm

[michelew]

Very cool Cori! SO when are you planning on revealing the new improved song?

[jayswett]

I admire anyone who takes on songwriting. I agree with the notion that another verse prior to the drowning verse might allow us to learn a bit more about the young lady. Also, with regard to additional instruments, if you have access to a violinist, the final product might benefit from adding him or her to the chorus.

[lueders]

Thanks Jay! A violonist, that would be cool (wish I did know one)...some sparse strings
over that chorus might be real cool. Thanks for the feedback & help sir.