Thanks Willem,tombo1230 wrote:Tom I exactly thought that when I was reading your lyricks,,,(the meaning)daryl wrote:Hi Daryl,tombo1230 wrote:
Tom, I really like this. But was unsure of where it was going. After the first verse, I thought "oh no everything WAS wonderful only yesterday, now what is today going to bring to this poor soul". And then the 2nd verse was just lovely with how the two met and blissfully were living together. The bridge brought back the foreboding feeling. The 3rd verse was still lovely and positive until the last line and I thought, "OK here it comes - here is where things turn". Then in the 4th verse I got confused. Does the first line refer to coming back from the holiday of the 3rd verse and what does the 2nd line mean about "talking points or matter of fact"? What is the unfinished business and why are things ending with regret? Everything in your story really sounded positive. Am I missing something?
it's about a holiday romance that is great while it lasted. When the guy gets home he is unsure about how real it was. With feet on the ground has a double meaning, having landed after his flight and also back to reality, a sort of anti-climax. The third verse is just the end of his vacation and they have to part. The fourth verse is the double meaning and also he is unsure where he stands. It's really just an outline of a story and needs to be longer. The bridge bit is where I need a chorus 'cos that one doesn't fit, so is really a place holder, but the subject is 'only yesterday.' To be honest I wasn't sure where this story was going because it's really not based on anything concrete. As I have said before, I much prefer just writing a song with words and music together. I find this method of writing the words first without music, really sterile. I don't think this works for me, I just don't feel it. I probably should have got the guitar out.
Tom N.
Willem
you are tuned in.
Tom N.