I remember reading this article before....
Rolling Stones - Satisfaction
Dermot
Songwriting/Lyric Challenge (Only Yesterday)
michelew wrote:
Thanks everyone it has been fun! Great idea Daryl
Tom N.
I think I will let it sink into my subconscious for a day or two and at some point I will see if there is really a song there. If there is I will let you hear it.Tom - I really like your story. There's both a scenario that lots of people can relate to as well as mystery. Are you going to put some music around it?
Shel
Thanks everyone it has been fun! Great idea Daryl
Tom N.
Tom,
I sure hope you get inspired. It would be cool to hear what you come up with. You may surprise yourself and find that changing your songwriting process allows you to come up with something a bit different.
Fingers crossed.
M
I sure hope you get inspired. It would be cool to hear what you come up with. You may surprise yourself and find that changing your songwriting process allows you to come up with something a bit different.
Fingers crossed.
M
thereshopeyet wrote:
M
I enjoyed reading that Dermot. Thanks
M
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Daryl
You never responded to my suggestion for your verse ?
You never responded to my suggestion for your verse ?
thereshopeyet wrote:
Sorry Dermot. I meant to get back to you and plum forgot. The "clink of our glasses" would work. But the "hospitality" doesn't because that means something different than the "open-house" I was referring to.Daryl Wrote:
I've been thinking of small changes to this verse Daryl and came up with this:I remember Friday night sleep overs and swinging in the park
And our tasty week-end Dim Sum feasts
Our Sunday open-house tours and laughing ‘til dark
And it still seems like only yesterday in a heart beat
I remember Friday night sleepovers and swinging in the park
The clink of our glasses with tasty Dim Sum feasts
Sunday hospitality tours and laughing 'til dark
It seems like only yesterday in a heart beat.
Dermot
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Daryl
our glasses - I liked because of also sounds like hour glasses a reflection of time and feast time.
Hospitality - I had mixed feelings about too, I was trying to replace it with one word.
Are you happy with Open - House?
our glasses - I liked because of also sounds like hour glasses a reflection of time and feast time.
Hospitality - I had mixed feelings about too, I was trying to replace it with one word.
Are you happy with Open - House?
thereshopeyet wrote:
Am I happy with "open-house"? Happy enough.
Overall, I'm not too happy with my entire lyric. But I am learning! Thanks.
Clever with the hidden "hour glass" reference.Daryl
our glasses - I liked because of also sounds like hour glasses a reflection of time and feast time.
Hospitality - I had mixed feelings about too, I was trying to replace it with one word.
Are you happy with Open - House?
Am I happy with "open-house"? Happy enough.
Overall, I'm not too happy with my entire lyric. But I am learning! Thanks.
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Daryl Wrote
I'm learning too and I think will be forever ! :dry:
It's been a fun experimental topic.
I'd be interested to see where your song goes from here.
Why not write down a heading (whatever you want) for each part to your song.
The take the idea you've got and place the same idea down again fresh a summary
of what you want to say under each heading.
Verse1
lnm;fmv;'mv';fm#
Verse 2
pmjb#fmb#mb#dmb
Chorus 1
slkdngvl;kv;n
etc....etc....
Dermot
DarylOverall, I'm not too happy with my entire lyric. But I am learning! Thanks.
I'm learning too and I think will be forever ! :dry:
It's been a fun experimental topic.
I'd be interested to see where your song goes from here.
Why not write down a heading (whatever you want) for each part to your song.
The take the idea you've got and place the same idea down again fresh a summary
of what you want to say under each heading.
Verse1
lnm;fmv;'mv';fm#
Verse 2
pmjb#fmb#mb#dmb
Chorus 1
slkdngvl;kv;n
etc....etc....
Dermot
thereshopeyet wrote:
That's a reasonable idea. I'll try it with my next "masterpiece". Thanks.Daryl Wrote
DarylOverall, I'm not too happy with my entire lyric. But I am learning! Thanks.
It's been a fun experimental topic.
I'd be interested to see where your song goes from here.
Why not write down a heading (whatever you want) for each part to your song.
The take the idea you've got and place the same idea down again fresh a summary
of what you want to say under each heading.
Verse1
lnm;fmv;'mv';fm#
Verse 2
pmjb#fmb#mb#dmb
Chorus 1
slkdngvl;kv;n
etc....etc....
Dermot